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Hooligan
07-09-2009, 04:59 AM
Been thinking of a new chorus. Feel free to add on.

What ever path you choose.......
You can send me anywhere........
I will put my needs aside...........
I will do......my best....for you,
I will do......my best....for you

MadHatter
07-09-2009, 02:07 PM
I like it... but the first line makes it seem like God hasn't made up his mind yet... that he doesn't know forsure yet...
maybe "which ever path you've chosen"

Hooligan
07-09-2009, 04:37 PM
well it was meant to say

what ever path you have chose for me. I may or may not have realized it yet, but I'll follow

What ever path you choose.......
You can send me anywhere........
I will put my needs aside...........
I will do......my best....for you,
I will do......my best....for you
The rest I'll leave to you

scooteraz
07-09-2009, 09:13 PM
Well, as I have said before, as a musician, I'm a great engineer. So, take this for what it is worth.

I would replace the "I will(s)" with "Help me(s)" then to make continuity and sense you would have to change the last line slightly

From:

What ever path you choose.......
You can send me anywhere........
I will put my needs aside...........
I will do......my best....for you,
I will do......my best....for you
The rest I'll leave to you

To:

What ever path you choose.......
You can send me anywhere........
Help me put my needs aside...........
Help me do......my best....for you,
Help me do......my best....for you
I'll leave everything to you

"I want to(s)" may work also, maybe a combination

Then it would be something like:

What ever path you choose.......
You can send me anywhere........
Help me put my needs aside...........
I want to do......my best....for you,
Help me do......my best....for you
I'll leave everything to you

Just my $0.02